"Not human? Then what the hell did you bring him here for? You know how this went last time, Sam!" Dean moved towards the door, his hand on his gun. He was several sorts of furious, Sam could tell by the steely tone his voice had taken.
"Just let me finish!" Sam said, grabbing his shoulder to stop him. Dean grimaced, but stopped, his expression saying the nonverbal equivalent of this better be good.
"He's not human, but he's nothing else we've ever seen before, either."
"And that's better how, exactly?" Dean angrily kicked a rock into the parking lot as he spoke.
"He's not from here. Or anywhere else we know."
"You know, how, because he said so?" Dean's derision was biting.
"He came in a box, Dean! A big, blue box, that just appeared out of nowhere. This is gonna sound crazy, but listen. His box just kind of materialized out of a windstorm."
"A box?" He sounded something between unbelieving and deflated. "You do realize you sound absolutely insane, even for us, Sammy."
"I know. But he did. He came in a box. And it's not just a box, somehow, inside, it's a spaceship." Sam wished he'd said something else, anything else, as soon as he'd said it. No…here we go again…. He knew he was pushing it.
"Ah, crap!." Dean muttered, scowling.
Sam sighed.
"So, you're saying what, he's an alien?"
"Yeah, Dean, I am."
"You really think-" Dean nodded at the Doctor, who was waving to them through the window from where he sat in a booth, "-that he's like, friggin' ET?"
"Yes." Sam groaned inwardly. This conversation wasn't going anywhere, and better yet, Dean was getting suspicious. Not that he didn't have reason to….
"Are you sure? You're not having issues again? Because Dad, Bobby, they all said there's no such thing."
"I know it doesn't make sense! But I'm saying, there is. Remember when we didn't think there were angels? He has two hearts. And the box, it was bigger, it was a spaceship, on the inside. And he had this gadget, this, sonic thing. He says he's from another universe."
"OK, OK. So maybe he's an alien. From this, other universe. How do we know he won't haul off and start trying to kill people? Like everything else we deal with?"
"He likes people-he has human friends, where he's from."
"You believe him, just because he said so?" Dean sounded exasperated.
"He's a lot like us, Dean," Sam replied.
"Really?" Dean scoffed.
"Yes. He's not like the things we hunt. He acts like he's human. A little crazy, maybe, but not homicidal. And he said-he says he hunts things. Like us."
"You're saying this guy's an alien-hunting alien? That came in a blue box? You know that's got to be the craziest friggin thing I've ever heard, Sam."
"Yes. That's exactly what I'm saying Dean, no matter how crazy it is. Because it's the truth. And, y'know, it wouldn't kill you to give me a little credit would it? You had Benny! Don't I deserve the same chance?"
"Fine. We can't just leave him in there with all those people. I guess while we're at it, we can talk to him." Dean sounded exhausted.
"Agreed."
"But you know how it goes, first sign of anything weird, we deal with him," Dean finished, walking towards the doors.
"Let's just talk to him," Sam said, following his brother into the diner.
As they entered, Sam saw the Doctor off to the side, at a table near the window, waving to them.
Dean stalked over to the table, agitation showing subtly in the tenseness of his face. Sam followed more slowly, ready to put out fires.
"Look! Look at the root beer!" An ebullient Doctor called out as he brandished a tankard of the fizzing beverage.
"Yeah, OK, Buddy,' Dean said as he slid into the booth, having reached the table before his brother.
He shot Sam a look over his shoulder that said without words, 'Alien? He's off his rocker!'
"Sam filled me in on most of it, but I'm still a little hazy on the details," Dean continued, leaning his elbows on the table, staring at the Doctor in the most intimidating way he could muster.
"So, tell me, What the hell are you?"
Sam wordlessly took a seat beside Dean, not bothering to interrupt the exchange between the two.
"Oh, don't mind me. I'm just a madman with a box." The Doctor smiled mischeiviously.
"Yeah, a little more specific than that?" He replied gruffly, rolling his eyes.
"Look, are we going to talk, or are we going to eat? Because I'm starving!" The Doctor rejoined.
Sam noticed the incremental increase in the tightness of Dean's jaw. Whether or not the Doctor knew it, he was pushing it.
"Yeah, what the heck," Sam began, in what he hoped would be a building-bridges sort of move, "Let's go ahead and eat. We can talk over food."
"Great!" The Doctor exclaimed.
Dean merely grunted in response, gazing moodily out the window.
As they shuffled through their menus, Sam felt his phone vibrate. A notification for a text popped up onscreen, which he tapped to read.
It was from Dean.
He's a crazy little freak alright.
Sam tapped his reply on the touchscreen, and kept reading his menu, knowing Dean had received it when he heard him scoff at reading:
So? Other people would say the same about us.
The reply was one word:
Seriously?!
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Hey, so, you're probably sick of hearing this, but once again I loved it. Sam and Dean felt perfect. And if I'm not mistaken the opening line referred to Ruby? Though I guess there's a few people it could refer too... Anyway, you did a really good job of capturing their tense, complicated relationship, not an easy thing to do with a show like supernatural.
You use versions of this phrase a lot. It's good that we have speaker tags, but I'm going to suggest a few ways that you could make them stronger, by bringing up those wonderful three words, "Show, don't tell." Now, there are times when you have to tell something rather than show up for the sake of brevity and clarity, but I don't think that's the case here. Try showing us what Dean's voice sounded like, is it quiet? Gruff? raspy? And what do he do physically to show that he's exasperated or exhausted? Does his head hang, his shoulders slump? Does he sigh, or close his eyes? Do his nostrils flare, do his eyes get bright, or narrow? Does he spit? There are a ton of different reactions you could use that would make the scene more visualize and give us greater insights into your characterization of Dean.So, now to my nitpicks:
If he walks to the door, we know he's done talking so you could delete, "Dean Finished".
Don't be so afraid of the word said. Despite what English teacher's say, these words actually slow your story down and trip up the reader. Readers automatically read over words like said, allowing the story to flow better. Unless you really want to emphasize how something is said, just use said or asked.
I like the contention between Sam and Dean over the doctor. It's cute. So far the story is progressing nicely, but I do feel like something major needs to happen soon..which is why I shall continue reading...
Hahahahaa.
Supernatural fan fiction
I loved how you maintained the relation between the brothers. Dean was just like Dean. Sam I think was a bit too...i don't know the word for it...but umm different.
I loved the dialogue between them and Dean's jibes
I have only watched supernatural till season 5 ( ''assbutt'' was the highlight, and I didn't like the leviathans ).
So I don't know whether this doctor character is made up by you, or if he is an actual one from the show.
He sounds interesting, so I'd love to read more of this, if you plan to write it further.
heehehhee
I was cracking up at the "E.T" remark by Dean.
Good job
Hassan
Thanks! "Assbutt" was probably the highlight of the first five seasons, def. lol The Doctor is the Eleventh Doctor. Writing this I pictured it as him, although any of them could work, I suppose.
Yes!
I loved this!
Very spot on, and I say this as a fan of both shows.
The dialogue between the brothers was on point, and I appreciate how you used it to introduce the reader to the third character. Brownie points for the clever insertion of just what seasonal arc in Supernatural this fits (yep, the 'Sam's seeing things' arc would have been the best time for a cross over. Before things got too dark and Dean would still give 'weird' people a chance).
The Doctor's moments made me think of 11.
I really don't have nitpicks to nitpick, but thanks for making this crossover happen.